Mock Analysis

Toby:E/A/A Low level 3- More relevant to stereotypes
          EX Low level 3- More comparison
          T 4 low level 2- Better understanding of terminology, wider range

To improve on the accuracy of points. Only have one mis en scene point, add camera sound and editing.  Mentioned the camera is on a high angle but not who it is on. Improve handwriting. Analyse all of the sequence.


Pete:E/A/A low level 3- Cut down the length of essay
        EX low level 4- Better relevant points
        T low level 2- Better terminology

Have to be more specific on certain points. Talk about gender more. Analyse more instead of describe.